Thoughts about writing…

Imagination…

Or… To think or be told what to think, that is the question…

This was kicked off by a lunch with a friend and his granddaughter, aged 17. We were talking about writing and music, and I asked her if she listened to music. She’d said she watched the videos first, then put the music on her playlist. I asked her why, and her answer surprised me. She said she ‘had’ to watch the video to see how the music was supposed to be interpreted!

Now I’m an old fart, I grew up listening to baseball and football on the radio, using my imagination and the word pictures presented by the announcers to ‘fill’ the scene in. Same with music, the lyrics ‘built’ the world the music was celebrating.

Where am I going with this?

In writing, do you paint extensive word pictures of your characters, the scenes, or the environment? Or do you give a basic word picture and expect the reader to fill in those gaps with their own imagination?

As always, I don’t think there is one ‘right’ answer, but in large, I think it depends on your readership. Are they used to being spoon fed everything? Or do you make them use their own imagination?

I know I tend to write sparse scenes and descriptions, knowing my readers will fill in the blanks with their imagination, which sometimes makes for interesting situations… I once had to change a scene because one of my beta readers was rather vehement that the particular character DID NOT have a moustache! Oops… My bad…

Two examples-

Danny looked out the viewport and saw the star filled darkness staring back at him. He stepped away, shaking his head and pondering the frailness of man against the vastness of space.

Danny looked out the viewport of the space ship, seeing a panoply of stars twinkling in the blackness of space, and shivered as he pondered the frailty of man and hubris of travelling through the vastness of space.

I would tend to use the first. Less detailed example, letting the reader determine the ‘depth’ of Danny’s feelings and what other thoughts he had, screened through the lens of those reader’s experiences. That also gives them ‘ownership’ if you will, of the story.

I’ve been told I’m more of a story teller than a writer, and I’m perfectly happy with that. I try to give the reader a good story without pushing any particular agenda, but I also don’t like the ‘perfect character’ that never makes a mistake (either male or female). I also try to give the characters depth without doing a data dump on them, which doesn’t always work, as my readers have pointed out a time or three… sigh…

I also try to write so that you also have believable characters,  believable situations, and believable weapons.

I also try to get the little details right, even if it’s science fiction. It’s not hard to do basic research, and that can make a difference between a wall book and one folks will read, and maybe even read again.

But writing westerns is kicking my butt on research. And there are some rat holes that you can go down literally for HOURS! Of course, when you’re doing research, you’re not writing…

Anyway, a little bit of background on why I write like I do… For better or worse…

Comments

Thoughts about writing… — 16 Comments

  1. Sounds like you and Peter need to have a chat over coffee and bourbon one day soon about cowboy background research.

    I also greatly prefer the first version. The second is too… stuffy? Starched collar? Pedantic? Then again, I am often so terse as to be nearly unintelligible. I know what I meant. I’m the verbal version of APL sometimes, I guess.

    • Indeed; too many “$5.00 words” in the second rendition! “Write the way you’d tell the story in person” has always been my credo…

      The “Mariner’s Prayer” says what Danny felt, short and sweet; “Lord, the sea is so big, and my boat is so small!”

  2. I would always choose the sentence that didn’t use the words “twinkling” and “panoply”.

    But then I’ve sold exactly zero copies of the zero books I’ve written and published.

  3. In the last couple years I saw a color photo of the Addam’s Family set (TV show) and while it made sense… it just felt wrong not being B&W. Maybe just what I am/was used to, but sometimes additional detail detracts. I find the pictures great on radio…

  4. I like the first way better – it allows me to fill in details of the picture (which in the case of this sentence is biased due to watching Star Trek TV and movies!). I think art of any kind is better if you view, listen or read it for yourself and don’t have someone interpret it for you. Art interpretation often reads way too much into things, sometimes to the field’s detriment. And today, of course, it all has to be PC and woke.
    One thing I do like to be added a bit are those details I may not be able to provide. As an example, smells – what is the character in the scene experiencing in other sense than sight – smells, sounds, touch (breeze; brush rubbing on chaps; etc.. But again, hints and short descriptions, not too much detail.

  5. My operational approach is to develop characters first. Present them with a few common and a few novel situations and show the reader what that character’s quirks are.

    Then as the story moves closer to the climax to move more quickly and let the characters, who now live in the reader’s minds, act with less written detail.

    It is a way to pick up the pace of the story and increase the urgency of the tempo.

    It is not the only way to skin a cat but I find it useful as a writer because the characters start telling me what THEY would do…hence the story starts writing itself. Being inherently lazy, I like that.

  6. All- Thanks for the comments. I’ll keep them in mind as I go forward.

    Posted from my iPhone.

  7. I like your stories, and the details I get to fill in. That means I’ll keep buying them.

  8. Stars don’t twinkle when you’re in space, nor can you hear the space station explode. Both those things require an atmosphere.

    If I’m reading a story, I depend on the author to tell me details which are pertinent to the plot, and which are enjoyable. I have no trouble filling in my own blanks.

    I’ve got the entire Time Life series on the old west if you’re interested.

  9. Stars don’t “twinkle” The atmosphere does it for them.

  10. Jim, I’m a little older than you, and after “reading”, next on my list was listening to the radio! In both cases, and even now, I put myself like a genie or a ghost hovering around up in the corner of the scene that is taking place at that moment.
    I was always on a horse way off to the side watching the Butterfied Stage out of some town. Listening to the music of whoever the composer, was would help me to visualize the rolling hills and valleys as it sped along!

    I feel sorry for kids today, because there is nothing left for them to imagine! In the western you are now posting tidbits of, I can almost taste that damn dust from riding drag! Umm Umm Good!

    Keep writing as you do! I like it!

  11. PK- Thanks

    TXRed- Yep!!!

    Bill- I have most of them. Thanks for the offer, and dead on about space!

    Sam- Concur!

    Ev- Yes, the kids have ‘lost’ imagination, IMHO. Thanks!

  12. Always preferred books because I get to stir my sluggish imagination to fill in details. In movies and TV, visual details are spoon fed from someone else’s imagination. TV especially; a wise person once called it “Chewing gum for the eye”.